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Hey Lily,

Thank you for sharing the poem with us. I really like the tempo of the poem. Please find some ideas that I thought will improve the poem, hope this helps.

1. “I see a light crossing through my mind”
This line creates a strong visual image. However, consider rephrasing it slightly for added impact, e.g., “A light traversing my…[Read more]

Hey Tania,

Thanks for sharing the poem with us. Find my feedback as follows:

1. Love exists without a why,
Consider rephrasing this line to make it more engaging and vivid. For example, “Love thrives without a reason,” or “Love blossoms without rhyme or reason.”
2. Who are you to question me?
This line introduces a confrontational tone, but it’s…[Read more]